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Haddon
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« on: June 03, 2011, 04:06:47 PM »

So tell me what you think of my web site Now its
 UNDER CONSTRUCTION STILL

                             www.bee-removals.com



Thanks in advance for the input.
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« Reply #1 on: June 03, 2011, 04:28:01 PM »

Not bad
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« Reply #2 on: June 03, 2011, 04:39:25 PM »

""Things to you need to know about Hive Removals.""

You should remove the word "TO"

""I find that most homes we live in have tons of space for a swarm of bees to move in all the bees need is a 3/8 inch whole to gain access to the space in your walls or attic.""

Put a period after move in, capitalize All, and a 3/8 hole, not whole.

There are a couple more areas where you left out periods at the end of sentences and didn't capitalize the beginning of the next.

Other than that, it is looking good.
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« Reply #3 on: June 03, 2011, 04:46:21 PM »

Hi Haddon,

I think the over-all design is good.  I like the separation of swarms and removals.

I am an English major (and have been called a grammar nazi), and currently do a lot of editing and proofing for website and print material for my job.  I would be happy to fine-tooth comb the copy for you, but I don't want to do it if that is not what you are looking for.  If you want, send me a pm and I will copy/paste your copy and send edits/corrections.  If you aren't interested, no worries.  As I said. Over all it looks good and most of what I see is minor / stylistic / and SEO things. 

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« Reply #4 on: June 03, 2011, 05:42:33 PM »

Right now I am number 8 down on a google search of Mississippi bee removal and 6 down on yahoo same search and don't exist with a search for just bee removal in yahoo that sucks

What I want to know is if you knew nothing about bees and was looking for someone to remove them would it help you understand how its done and why I might charge for swarms and why I am going to charge for cutouts.

Any big Grammar errors let me know too.

Oh and its only cost 35 dollars for the whole year so far but they have me scheduled for 108 bucks next year they are not getting that much i will swap companies.


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« Reply #5 on: June 03, 2011, 09:38:50 PM »

I don't know that I would put up there about hardship cases.  People around here can have money running out their rear and be living in a dump.  Besides we all do them and can make them feel less of a person.  I will say you'd be surprised at how many of them want to pay you something though.  Just need to find a different way to approach that.
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